Erotic Poetry

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I wrote these just before Hallowe'en. Have finally found the words that were missing. I think they - certainly the first one - still need a little work. If you have any suggestions for what's missing, I'd love to hear them.

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Strut

I like the way you strut
Cocky
Like you own the road
Loping, lean and lanky on long
Strong legs
Jeans tight to your muscled thighs and
Black hat riding low over your eyes

You make me weak in the knees

Wanton with want

Aching to flay
that thin veneer of brazen bravado
Peel it
back like skin
Exposing
the pulse and throb of
naked need

I like to suck that smirk
Off your face
Make you moan
Whimper
All your edges gone
Yielding under the onslaught
Of my touch

I like the way you melt for me
your Gutsy turned to gasping,
all your solid walls dissolving,
Body arched in acquiescence,
begging
for the mercies
of my mouth

Yeah, I like the way you strut
So certain and so self-assured

Strut into the maw
of my desire


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Hungry

Woman
I want
To devour you

To taste the salt
Of your sweat on my tongue
Sink my teeth into your trembling
Flesh and feel
The muscle
Shudder Underneath

I want to claim your mouth
With my own
Breathe your breath and
Swallow
Every moan

I want
So much more
Than just one taste

I want
To devour you
whole

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Questions, comments? Suggestions (particularly for the first one, which is... in need of some sort of tweaking, but I'm not sure what)?